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Rate plz:! 1 is very bad, 5 is moderate, 10 is Farking good!
1/10 78%  78%  [ 7 ]
2/10 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
3/10 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
4/10 11%  11%  [ 1 ]
5/10 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
6/10 11%  11%  [ 1 ]
7/10 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
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 Post subject: [Story] Saving Jamie.
PostPosted: Fri Mar 21, 2008 6:25 pm 
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Chapter 1:
The happening.

It was the start of the long weekend. It was Friday, the national day where you get a day off from school. After a nice while of sleeping, Jamie White woke up, and lying in his bed, he just realized that he was going to be late for school… Way too late..
But then he remembered that he had a day off, so he had a relaxed day ahead. He stood up, took his bathrobe and walked downstairs. His mother and father were just arguing about something. He couldn’t realize what it was about, because he was still a bit sleep drunk and colors were still shooting around before his eyes. He went to the breakfast table and thought:
“I’m not even hungry… why bother making something if I’m not going to eat it?”
“I haven’t had my coffee yet!!”
“But Henri, we have to go!”
“I want to have some coffee first, and then we’ll go after that horse trailer of yours.”
He heard his parents scream at eachother.
“It’s that time again… mom is going to spend money we don’t even have…” he heard his sister, Alisson say.
It scared the heck out of Jamie.
”Why do you always have to do that!?” he screamed at her. “Can’t you see that I just came out of bed?!”
“Hmmmm.. yeah, and I can smell it, too. You always smell so bad when you’ve just woken up!”
“Yeah, yeah.. I’ll shower in a minute. Relax!”
“Uhuh, yeah, sure…”
“What’s that supposed to mean!?” he screams after her, but she already closed the door to the living room, and switched on the TV.
He sighs…
“Come on, Henri!! We don’t have all day!!”
His dad grumpily drinks his coffee, putting the mug really loudly on the table. “I’m coming, Maddy!”
“It’s about time!!”
The doors bangs shut.
Jamie sighs again.
Then he stands up, and walk towards the bathroom for a shower.

Fifteen minutes later, he walks into the living room again, in his bathrobe and with wet hair.
“Jesus Christ, Jamie!! Put on some clothes!” Alisson’s face looks angry. “And dry your damn hair for once in your life, and if it isn’t in your life, maybe in MY life, if you please?!”
He grumps, and walks towards the laptop in the back if the living room. He starts it up, and waits until he can finally go on the internet. He rubs his stomach.
“Why am I not hungry yet? Normally I can work down half a ham, but now… something must be wrong. I feel something is coming.”

“Well, I’m off to work,” Alisson says with a smile. “See you tonight!” one minute later she rides by the window on her bike, with a lit cigarette.
“Ghehe..” he thinks. At least I could still steal one from her before she left.
He steps outside in his bathrobe, put on some sneakers, and lits the cigarette he took from his sister. After smoking it, he steps inside again, and goes back to the laptop.

Without even thinking about the strange feeling again for some hours, his sister has came home, May. She is the most sporty one of the three. With Allison’s anger attacks it’s not Jamie’s favourite sister, but May can also be at the bottom. With her ongoing sarcasm, her own computer, arrogance and other things he most of the time doesn’t see her, or is in a sarcasm fight with her, which she mostly wins.
“Oi, May, the gym is closed now, right?”
“Yeah,” she dully replies, hypnotized by a teleshopping program on TV.
“And it’s opening again around 3:30, right?”
“Yeah…” she replies again, still hypnotized.

He goes to Youtube, and starts watching his anime, with the speakers out loud just to annoy May. She sonly goes to her room when the teleshopping program has ended.

“Ah, 3:15, finally…” he sighs. He shuts down the laptop, grabs his bag of gym clothes, and grabs his bike from the shed. He locks up, and rolls a cigarette from his tobacco. He lights it, and goes to the gym.
It’s still quite a trip to the gym. Jamie lives about, 2 miles away from the small village, and he goes by bike. Well, at least he can smoke on the way.
Suddenly, a big black van is driving past him, and stops. 4 big men tie him up, and throw him in the van. He tries to scream, but he can’t, because they taped his mouth shut. He doesn’t know where they are going, because they also blindfolded him.

When they stop, he gets dragged out of the van, and he get carried somewhere. He feels they are walking up stairs, and where he ends, it is very cold and windy.


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Well, this is the story I thought of today, I was riding my bike, and it just hit me.

The beginning is also the beginning of this day, for me.

Next time I'll add a chapter 2.

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
PostPosted: Fri Mar 21, 2008 6:46 pm 
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kinda boring.....but don't take it negatively, critisim helps you do better. Or so im told.

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
PostPosted: Fri Mar 21, 2008 7:01 pm 
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Well, yeah....

The first chapter is never really exiting, but hey, there will be a bunch of more characters, and Jamie isn't even the main character in the story..

I'll write a chapter tow soon....

And pilot, it's actually Shaving Ryans Privates..

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
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The actual movie sucked

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
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Yet, the dutch parodies are for liphe.

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 5:47 pm 
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Yay, at least 2 people voted...

Now, if more people would vote, then I know if I should go on with chapter 2 or not...

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 6:13 pm 
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wow 4 people cared enough to actually vote...

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 6:16 pm 
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redneck wrote:
wow 4 people cared enough to actually vote...


but, did those people care enough to actually read???

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 9:55 pm 
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Well, I think only 1 person has really read it, and the others just hit the 1/10 button...

But, if you did read it, could you please tell me why you voted 1/10????

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 Post subject: Re: [Story] Saving Jamie.
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Whoa hold it there n1gga! I aint readin' all that shiet!


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