poetry - voices among me

Shaka Laka · **Joined:** May 2009 **Posts:** 365 **Location:** naw

Hello guys, I want everyone's opinion about this piece my little brother wrote. He is 14 years old and is hearing impaired. I am trying to inspire him to write more poetry. I truly believe he has a gift, and plan on putting him on some kind of a paper for the public to see.

Voices Among Me

I stand there concentrating
To the words I hear
But the voices around me
Are upsetting my ear

I feel troubled inside
I feel the need to scream
Distractions around me
Water down a stream

Hysterical inside
I wanted to flee
The man's voice I can't hear
His mouth movement I see

Psychedeelic · **Joined:** Mar 2007 **Posts:** 716 **Location:**

wow nice for a 14 year old, keep inspiring him, I believe he will get better and better

*BlackFox · **Joined:** Sep 2008 **Posts:** 7923 **Location:**

It wasn't bad at all!

Squirt · **Joined:** Jan 2008 **Posts:** 8186 **Location:**

The poem is good for a 14 year old.

Your going for the whole deal? As in 15 years we'll see the movie of how a deaf boy became the greatest poet of his time?

Shaka Laka · **Joined:** May 2009 **Posts:** 365 **Location:** naw

Thank you very much for the positve feedback. This will help us more

I will post some more poems later.

Kirkaldi · **Joined:** Jul 2008 **Posts:** 3083 **Location:** nyc

Nice poem, I can't even do something like that. :cry:

.Banshee · **Posted:** Tue May 05, 2009 12:00 am

Wow nice poem. It has such a smooth flow and I can feel all the anguish in it. WOW tell him great job for me.

Vinyl · **Joined:** Jan 2009 **Posts:** 515 **Location:**

Thanks for putting the stuff up, bro. Thanks for the positive comments guys, it's cool that you like my stuff.

aznronin · **Joined:** Jun 2008 **Posts:** 1393 **Location:**

wow that was nice

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